Tissue crushed And not connecting Vessels ruptured Yet skin unbroken Trapped blood No place to go Tender to touch Red and purple, Blue and black, Green then yellow Now light brown Fading away Like you. You gave me All the colours Of the rainbow.
Wow Libby love this. As usual your own special touch. Fading away/Like you. There's such power in your simplicity of style. No one write like you do. Truly unique and always surpassing yourself. Wonderful. Gay
I remember this..your quiet irony, your simplicity which I believe reveals the aspects of the inner you. I am moving as much as I can these days to simplicity of style and words; however, sometimes I feel I am still shouting. Loved this the second time around!
Hard write, you gave me all the colours of the rainbow with a smack...yes I've been here, and I'm never going back. Thanks for sharing
ReplyDeletedamn. abuse sucks...the deepening then fading of that bruise is affective...
ReplyDeleteYes such abuse really does suck
ReplyDeleteShould never be done
But powerful words you write with a rainbow of thought.
wow... I love that closing.. so unique! A sad subject, but you wrote such colorful lines.
ReplyDeleteBravo!
Wow Libby love this. As usual your own special touch. Fading away/Like you. There's such power in your simplicity of style. No one write like you do. Truly unique and always surpassing yourself. Wonderful. Gay
ReplyDeleteThis is nice, I like the comparison. The bruise imagery works brilliantly.
ReplyDeleteI know this story.. i lived this story.. it is only a story for me now.
ReplyDeletewell done dear..
Wow...strong!
ReplyDeleteI really like the ending!!
ReplyDeleteOh, wow. Powerful piece.
ReplyDeleteTakes much courage to post something of this magnitude, even if brief, Libby. Here's to healing, of any circumstance.
ReplyDelete-Pounds
So sad, such hurt, you are courageous to recall your experience in a poem. Beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteThank you for being a voice for the suffering ones. And the rainbow promise of never again. Great write.
ReplyDeletepretty strong stuff, and equally sad
ReplyDeletebut commendable write.
As ever the simple makes for the strongest emotional impact
ReplyDeleteThank you Libby, you speak for some who can't put these things into words, yet or perhaps ever.
ReplyDeletewow. i agree with John-- simple, visual, and emotionally staggering. Thank you for sharing this with the world.
ReplyDeleteThat would be a crushing end to a romance
ReplyDeleteyou are vivid in this piece
thanks for the One Stop support each week Libby
i remember this one...nice flashback for the Poetics prompt
ReplyDeletesad and tragic..nice one ~
ReplyDeleteit seems real, a sad subject, you have used the simplest words showing it.
ReplyDeletethe ending with the word rainbow makes one look up to the sky, wondering about hope!
beautiful writing, I love the feel of following through your words.
I remember this..your quiet irony, your simplicity which I believe reveals the aspects of the inner you. I am moving as much as I can these days to simplicity of style and words; however, sometimes I feel I am still shouting. Loved this the second time around!
ReplyDeleteVery effective tight write. You use color to describe the unthinkable and I'm seeing red!
ReplyDeletebrilliant and powerful.
ReplyDelete:)